14.1 = MLA and First Drafts Due

Ok 101 Campers:

Your drafts are due today.  Don't worry if they are hotter messes than your Aunt Shirley's stuffing disasters or your cousin Steve's new girlfriend, Esmerelda .... you will have time to fix them!

Ok - the schedule

1) Lets review the assignment carefully. 
2) We will review MLA style in general and then, more specifically, about your papers.

Very general MLA video if you need it:
http://www.teachertube.com/viewVideo.php?video_id=120829

Assignment:
Please note: I will not explan the assignment by email individually to students, especially not the night before the due date. Consider using the following as a checklist. 

The stapled research paper will have (in this order):

• A Body of at least 1,000 words (does not include multimodal elements, Works Cited, Title page, etc.)
• At least 2 multimodal elements (embedded or linked)
• A Work's Cited page with a minimum of 5 valid and reliable sources to research and write your paper, not including those used for multimodal enhancement.
• An Annotated Bibliography

Note: MLA Citation (in-text and in WC) must be done correctly. It alone will account for 10% of the grade. 

Note 2: Title page not needed

13.1 (11/25 and 11/26) Outlining a paper - using research

Today we'll talk about the "balancing act" of writing an analytical research paper. 

You'll need to include enough of everything, but not too much of anything.  You are ONLY writing 1000 words....Since you've just read tens of thousands of word on your topic, you know more than you could ever "fit" into a short(ish)  essay.

 

 Today you'll jump right in to outlining!

But wait ... too soon.  See, you have to make some decisions first.  What EXACTLY is your paper about, anyway?  And how many "subtopics" - or smaller parts - will your research support?  These might be "different relationships" or "various causes of an effect" or "stages in a progressions"  or even "opposing or divergent expert opinions/theories on a topic".  If its more than 4, can you cut or combine some of them.  If its less than 3, can you stretch somethings out - or do you need more research?

Here is a sample outline

Your paper will be at least 1000/words (about 4 pages).  I would aim for a distribution like this:

• Intro (150 -200words)
• 1st subtopic (250-350 words)
• 2nd subtopic (250-350words)
• 3rd subtopic (250-350 words)
• Conclusion (100 -150 words)

OR

• Intro (150 -200words)
• 1st subtopic (200-250 words)
• 2nd subtopic  (200-250 words)
• 3rd subtopic  (200-250 words)
• 4th subtopic (200-250 words)
• Conclusion (100-150 words)

I suggest you use subheadings to keep your organziation clear and tight - at least in your first draft.

Make sure that, along the ways, you always keep a detailed, written track of where your information/paraphrases and quotes come from (last name of author, page number, source).  Also, any language not your wown (quoted) must always remain in " " marks.  Never decide to put them back in later! 

What's due 14.1 (aka the first class back after Thanksgiving)?

A typed draft of at least 750 words divided evenly into different subtopic categories.  It can be printed or merely available on a FULLY CHARGED tablet or laptop. Each subtopic category (except the intro) must reference at least 1 source.  Each paper must reference at least 3 different sources total.  Bring all sources to class for an in-class MLA citation workshop.  Bring in a technology that you can use to edit your work - either a a FULLY CHARGED tablet or laptop or  a printed draft with pen/pencil for handwritten changes.

Have a lovely and wonderful break with your families - well, except for the part where you have to write these research papers :)

12.2 (11/20 and 11/21) - Annotated Bibliography

In class we will be working on annotated bibliographies.  The final, typed version in proper MLA format with at least 4 sources is due Week 13/Day 1 (aka next mon/tues)

draft my paper

12.1 (11/18 and 11/19) Research

Today we will talk about Academic Research!

Level I: Open Web (use with caution)
Level II: Print/Web Access (Reliable Books, Newspapers and Magazines - often both in print and online.
Level III: Closed Search Engines -  Here's the link to the Library
Level IV: Self-Conducted (First-Hand)

The research paper will have a

+Title Page
+ Body of at least 1,000 words (does not include multimodal elements, Works Cited, Title page, etc.)
+ At least 2 multimodal elements (embedded or linked)
+ An Annotated Bibliography
+ Works Cited Page

You will use a minimum of 5 valid and reliable sources to research and write your paper, not including those used for multimodal enhancement.

MLA Citation (in-text and in WC) must be done correctly.  It alone will account for 10% of the grade. 

Lets Woordle in class!

http://www.wordle.net/create

Schedule for rest of semester

Schedule for rest of semester

This weekend's HW: Preliminary topics and group affiliations due. Independant researchers must find one article on their topic as a "pass" to move forward. Every member of a group must find a dinstinct piece of research on the topic (2 members, 2 articles; 3 members, 3 articles etc).

From this point on in the semester, students are encouraged to bring any portable technology they have to class (laptops, tablets, smartphones) to aid with research projects.

12.1 (11/18 and 11/19) - Introduction to academic research, Part I.

HW. Locate and skim at additional sources on your topic. If available, reading just the abstract (carefully) is ok.

• independants find 2-3 more
• groups of 2 find 4-5
• groups of 3 find 5-6
• groups of 4 find 7-8

Bring printed articles or digital links you can access in class to next session.

12.2. (11/20 and 11/21) - Introduction to academic research, Part II.

• Annotated bibliography Project

13. 1 (11/25 and 11/16) - Outlining and using research as evidence
hw. drafts due after break

13.2 Thanksgiving

14.1 (12/2 and 12/3) Drafts due; MLA Workshop

14.2 (12/4 and 12/5) - Final Drafts Due - Peer Review

Note:  From this point on, we will have class discussions, screen films, etc during class.  The deadline for ths project is staggered so that all students get their last paper returned asap in case they want to revise. Late penalties of 10 points a day will be applied, so do not be late.

15.1 (12/9; 12/10);Papers due - Red and Yellow

15. 2 (12/11; 12/12) Papers due (green and blue)

16. 1 (12/16; 12/17) Papers Due Purple.

16.2  (12/18; 12/19) Last day of class. Wrap it up and intro to 102.

11.2 (dates 11/13 and 11/14)

****Due to cancellation earlier in the week, Purple class will have day 11.1 on 11/14 .  Review prior post.  Purple class students do not have to do what follows***************




First we will have presentations by students, including

Red - Steven Ewart
Yellow - Lexi, Roxanne, Haider, Hieu, DJ, Raphael, Christy, Kyle and Kisha
Green - Melanie
Blue - Brittany and Noelle
Purple - TBA - postponed to the following week. Purple class will have day 11.1 on 11/14 . no HW.

Then we will discuss the film we watched and compile a master list of topic ideas. 

Schedule for rest of semester

This weekend's  HW: Preliminary topics and group affiliations due. Independant researchers must find one article on their topic as a "pass" to move forward. Every member of a group must find a dinstinct piece of research on the topic (2 members, 2 articles; 3 members, 3 articles etc).

XC Challenges 2 and 3 - Gratitude letters.  Worth 1 point per round.  Round 1 due 12.2. (11/20 and 11/21); Round 2 due 13. 1 (11/25 and 11/16)  
Compose one or more letters of gratitutde for someone. Total word count at least 500 words.  Letters must be sent.  Sent emails can be printed out.  Cards/physical letters must be brought to class - unsealed - with approporiate postage and envelope.  I will drop them in the mail for you.

From this point on in the semester, students are encouraged to bring any portable technology they have to class (laptops, tablets, smartphones) to aid with research projects.

12.1 (11/18 and 11/19) - Introduction to academic research, Part I. 

HW. Locate and skim at additional sources on your topic. If available, reading just the abstract (carefully) is ok.

• independants find 2-3 more
• groups of 2 find 4-5
• groups of 3 find 5-6
• groups of 4 find 7-8

Bring printed articles or digital links you can access in class to next session.

12.2. (11/20 and 11/21) - Introduction to academic research, Part II. 

• Annotated bibliography Project

13. 1 (11/25 and 11/16) - Outlining and using research as evidence
hw. drafts due after break

13.2 Thanksgiving

14.1 (12/2 and 12/3) Drafts due;  MLA Workshop

14.2 (12/4 and 12/5) - Final Drafts Due - Peer Review


Note: From this point on, we will have class discussions, screen films, etc during class. The deadline for ths project is staggered so that all students get their last paper returned asap in case they want to revise. Late penalties of 10 points a day will be applied, so do not be late.

15.1 (12/9; 12/10);Papers due - Red and Yellow

15. 2 (12/11; 12/12) Papers due (green and blue)

16. 1 (12/16; 12/17) Papers Due Purple.

16.2 (12/18; 12/19) Last day of class. Wrap it up and intro to 102.

11.1 (dates 11/11 and 11/12)

Today we'll watch the documentary Happy via Netflix instant streaming.  If you can't make it to class, the film is available through Netflix.

Registration also starts today!  Woo-Hoo!


Here are my classes for winter and Spring 2014

Wintersession

• The Short Story ENG206 CRN 10015
• M,T, W,Th, F 9-1215 am

Spring 2014
Eng 102 - Intro to Lit (3 sections)

• CRN 21534 meets MW 8 AM
• CRN 21745 meets TR 930 AM
• CRN 21843 meets TR 2 PM

ENG 131 Creative Writing (2 sections)

• CRN 20618 meets Sundays 10 AM
• CRN 21860 meets TR 1230 PM

ENG 221 The Art of Poetry

• CRN 20720 meets MW 930AM

10.2

Today, we'll have presentations, then - if there's time - begin to watch this documentary...

http://www.youtube.com/v/JcMQmuvzPmI?autohide=1&version=3&autoplay=1&autohide=1&attribution_tag=nVFB-FZZQvmIdj5J-Ek4JQ&feature=share&showinfo=1

Hw - come up with 10 possible topics for research paper - not just for yourself for for someone else. Try to make them really diverse from one another.

Extra credit option #1 - Prepare and present your own "creative" product of some kind addressing the topic of happiness. This could be a work of literature (poem, story, scene) or some thing else with words (song. comedy routine, film script). You could also do something non-verbal (dance or paint or draw or play music or cook) , however in those cases you'd have to write a 200 word "artists statement" to show how the artwork/performance linked to the themes. This is time sensitive. Performances/presentations will be done on class w11 day 2

10.1

Today, we will share our new knowledge - garnered from the weekend's reading - via a "round robin."

Reading Group Codes here

15 min disscussion group (all As together, all B's etc)

Then remix into groups with one A,B,C,D and E as assigned to explain ideas to others.


HW.

+ Read a different essay from the group that caught your attention  and write 1 paragraph response to it.
+ Read and understand (and print out)  the short section about a great philosopher's views of happiness here:  http://www.pursuit-of-happiness.org/history-of-happiness/
You will be doing group presentations in class w10d2.

Reading groups
a) Buddha
b) Socrates
c) Confucius
d) Epicurus
e) Mencius

9.2

Today we'll be writing in-class the short 250-word response portion of assignment #3.



HW: look up your Reading Group Code here
https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B5fN4Tn3sDzsX3hNQy1sQnFKbms/edit?usp=sharing

Find the reading assigned to your letter code below.  Print, Read and Annotate over the Weekend.  Be prepared to explain it (using notes) to others who have not read it. 

A - The Futile Persuit of Happiness
B - Why the Happy are Nuts and Pathologies of Hope
C - All Joy and No Fun: Why Parents Hate Parenting
D - What Makes us Happy?
E - But Will it Make You Happy?

Problem hacker
If the link doesn't work, read a different article rather than non.
If your printer is broken, take detailed notes.
If you aren't sure you will have technology over the next 5 days, print it out at school before you leave.
If you are busy, start early and read one page at a time.

and then we will watch either this video or this one - or hoth!

Blue Class Reminder

Blue class meets on Halloween at 11Am at Kreiling Hall for a mini feel good field trip! If you can't make it, or don't want to go, we'll be back in the normal classroom at 11:30.

here's a campus map
http://www.sunysuffolk.edu/About/AmmMap.asp

Due on class 9.2 (10/30/13 or 10/31/13)

. Formal Assignment #3 - worth 20% of the final grade!

 For this dense and flawless essay of at least 500-650 words, you will compile one of two kinds of critical "real world" persuasive pieces of writing, plus complete some supplementary writing and research.  

We will complete section (ii) - the 250 word short response - in class  

Option A

You will Write:

(i) a future (2014/5) "transfer application essay" to a specific college and degree program;
 (ii) a short response(250 words)linking this college and degree choice to your future career plans; and
 (iii) a 2-page outline of short-term goals you'll need to achieve to be in position to make this application FOR REAL. This can be the goal planning chart we worked on in class.

Option B
You will Write:
(i) a future (2023)"cover letter" to accompany a job application - or "loan application" to a bank to fund your business, etc.;
(ii) a short personal response (250 words) describing why this job will be the right one for you; and
(iii) a 2-page outline of short- and medium-term goals you'll need to achieve to be in position to make this application FOR REAL. This can be the goal planning chart we worked on in class. Resource

Schedule.
In class (wk8. day 2) - Outlining hw. due
 (wk9.day 1)- Draft - Peer Review
hw. Essay due (wk 9. day 2)

9.1 Peer Review of Job Letter/Transfer Essay

In today's class we'll complete some structured peer reviews work with classmates.

Follow directions exactly on the forms to help your friend improve thier writing.

Students who do not have drafts of papers with them will not receive participation or homework credit for the day. They will not lose attendence credit, but will lose any "wiggle room" for attendance moving forward. They will work silently.



REMINDER: Papers are due next class. 

Week 11.1 (dates 11/11 and 11/12)

Today we'll be watching the documentary Happy

 

Also, reguistration opens today.....


My courses will be...

Wintersession

• The Short Story ENG206   CRN 10015
• M,T, W,Th, F 9-1215 am

Spring 2014
Eng 102 - Intro to Lit (3 sections)

• CRN 21534 meets MW 8 AM
• CRN 21745 meets TR 930 AM
• CRN 21843 meets TR 2 PM

ENG 131 Creative Writing (2 sections)

• CRN 20618 meets Sundays 10 AM
• CRN 21860 meets TR 1230 PM

ENG 221 The Art of Poetry

• CRN 20720 meets MW 930AM

8.2 PLANNING SESSION

Planning a project is a lot like planning a paper: today we do both!

8.1 The Art (and Science) of Persuasion

Week 8, Day 1: The Art of Persuasion

 

I.  Write a paragraph in which you try your hardest to convince someone to give you something you want.  It can be serious or silly, but make sure its not so personal that you won't feel comfortable sharing it.

 

II. Sharing stories, listing rhetorical techniques onthe board.

 

You don't have to beg for what you want......Use persuasion!

 III. Aristotle's ideas:  Ethos, Pathos, Logos, Telos and Kairos

IV.  Science of Persuasion




V. Connecting it all to the assignment. 

HW: Think about how you will structure your persuasive essay to convince the employer/or college admission officer to give you what you want.  Come up with at least one "angle" -in the form of a sentence - for each of the following concepts.  Some will be easier than others, but try them all. In the end, you'll only use the ones that work.  For now, stretch your creativity and intelligence to find something for each one.

a) ethos
b) logos
c) pathos
d) telos
e) kairos
f) reciprocity
g) scarcity
h) authority
i) consistancy
j) liking
k) consensus 

Class cancelled 10/17

Revisions for green, blue and purple groups now due next Tuesday.

HW. Review yesterday's blog posting. Complete scavenger hunt due in next class. Please note the new paper, introduced in the posting, is NOT due...only the activities listed under the heading scavenger hunt.  If you have questions I am available by email all weekend.

Week 7.2 Intro to Peruasive Wiritng / Paper 3

Introduction to Formal Assignment #3 - worth 20% of the final grade! For this dense and flawless essay of at least 500-650 words, you will compile one of two kinds of critical "real world" persuasive pieces of writing, plus complete some supplemenary writing and research.

Option a) You will Write:
(i) a future (2014/5) "transfer application essay" to a specific college and degree program;
(ii) a short response(250 words)linking this college and degree choice to your future career plans; and
(iii) a 2-page outline of short-term goals you'll need to achieve to be in position to make this application FOR REAL.

Option b) You will Write:
  (i) a future (2023)"cover letter" to accompany a job application - or "loan application" to a bank to fund your business, etc.;
  (ii) a short personal response (250 words) describing why this job will be the right one for you; and
  (iii) a 2-page outline of short- and medium-term goals you'll need to achieve to be in position to make this application FOR REAL.

FIRST STEPS - DUE ON MONDAY/ TUESDAY

Scavenger Hunt.

Find, Print and Annotate at least 4 of the following, depending on your needs:

•  A current advertisement for your dream job complete with job requirements, etc. (Try sites like Monster, etc.)
• An informational sheet about your career choice. (try sites like this one)
• A biography or interview of an accomplished person in your chosen field.
• You can personally interview someone in your future field about the best ways to "break in" and the steps to follow. Write up the summary.
• Information from any 4-year college about the major you would need to follow.
• Information from any trade or specialized training institute about your career.
• Information from any agency or licencing board (Army? NYS DOE? etc.)
• Salary information about your chosen field. 
• A list of potential professions stemming from a specific major.

By Request: More Tony Robbins

Dr. Mccormick's Classes cancelled for thursday

Hello Green, Blue and Purple 101 groups,

Sad news: I can't make it to class tomorrow (Thursday 10/10).  I will miss you and am sorry for the late notice. I will understand if you are devastated. 

Instead of class, I'm giving you a little assignment. Your homework is to watch the following video and then to write a short 200 word response linking one or more of the speaker's ideas with your personal experiences. This writing is of the get-it-on-paper variety.  It will not be graded beyond the fact that it is done or not done.  

video: http://www.ted.com/talks/tony_robbins_asks_why_we_do_what_we_do.html

Your paper deadline is also extended to Thursday the 17th (not the 15th) 

See you next Tuesday.  Have a great weekend!

Dr. M

Week 6. 2

1) Review a few more "writing rules" 13-16.

2) Complete this worksheet on the subject alone or  in groups of 2-3. 

3) Watch this video


4) Class

4)  HW.  Prepare to submit revision next week.  Staple together a) new draft; b) revision report and c) earlier version graded by the teacher. 

Many of you wrote about the value of "fun" and "play" in education.  This famous BU Professor agrees with you!

Week 6 Day 1: Getting Happy at Work

Today we begin work on the "Happiness at Work" module.

1) Watch Daniel Pink Video  (teacher will check HW as it runs)

2) Discuss MSP Method
3) Student Free-Writing
4) "Hack My Style" #9-12

Week 5 day 2

Today, you will have the entire class period to work silently on your revision of the "Happiness Philosophy" paper.

Revisions are now due on October 14/15! (a change)


(Challenge: Consider adding or tweaking the title.)

Over the weekend, in addition to working on your paper,  I'd like you to begin doing a little prep work for the next unit - Happiness at Work. 

 1) Take this personality test: http://www.humanmetrics.com/cgi-win/jtypes2.asp
Write down your 4 letter code (ENFP; INSJ etc). This is your Myers-Briggs personality Type

2) Then go here to get a quick overview of your personality type.  At the bottom of each paragraph-length entry is a link to read more. Clink link and then print this page.  At the bottom of this page you will find interesting links to career information for people with your type/ Follow links to explore the type and career options.  Print the page with career information.

Week 5 - Revision Week

Re + Vision

Revision is one of the exquisite pleasures of writing. -- Bernard Malamud

1) Student Viewpoints - What is Revision?

Take a view minutes to brainstorm at least 10 other words/short phrases that the word "revision" brings to mind. Some may be synonyms ("rewrite"), others may be techniques ("read out loud"), and a few may even be unique to your experience ("turn off my phone").

Extra steps: Famous Writers Explain the Value of Revision.

2) Broadening Perspectives
Class discussion about Revision. Based on these expert opinions, are there any new words/definitions we should add to the board? Any existing ones we should emphasize?


3) Revision Steps
Revision Questions

Revise in order to:

• add important information and/or more appropriate examples.
• enhance your examples with details and text-based support (quotes, for example).
• delete unnecessary information and/or less appropriate examples.
• revise sentences to make their meanings crystal-clear.
• revise sentences to improve their style.
• correct grammatical mistakes, typos and other errors.

(Checklist adapted from OWL/Purdue)

• Find your main point.

• Identify your readers and your purpose.

• Evaluate your evidence.

• Save only the good pieces.

• Tighten and clean up your language.

• Eliminate mistakes in grammar and usage.

• Switch from writer-centered to reader-centered.

4) Ready, Set, Revise!

Today, I'll be handing back your initial papers about your happiness philosophy. Take a moment to reread them with fresh eyes.

Homework (due week 5 day 2): a 300-word "re + vision report" outlining your

• analysis of the essays strengths and weaknesses

• detailed plan to revise the paper. Consider your thesis presentation, organization, choice of examples, use of quoted materials. You can identify and mention specific grammar or syntactical changes you might make (ex. "I will write fewer fragments"), but this should not make up the bulk of your plan.

Students are welcome to work on this project in teams or with tutors - of course, I recommend visiting the Writing Center.

Dr. McCormick’s Voluntary Paper Revision Guidelines

Any student may re-write a passing essay in hopes of raising their grade. I recommend consulting with me during office hours and/or with a tutor in the Writing Center.

To be resubmitted, revised papers must:

1. demonstrate substantial change. Papers where teacher’s corrections are merely transcribed – or those that offer only minimal edits – will not receive higher grades.
2. be attached to the corrected original copy with teacher’s marks.
3. be turned in to professor within two weeks of the date it was returned to the student or by the final day of class (whichever is earlier).
4. include an additional 250-or-more word typed description of the changes made and the rationale for these edits. If they failed to incorporate any of the teacher’s suggestions into the revision, students should address the reason(s) they chose not to do so.
5. exclude no more than 2 of the corrections on the original for grammar, syntax, spelling, etc.

There are no exceptions to these conditions

HW Help: A great resource for college essay revision can be found here.

Grammar Help.
Comma Splices?  Fragment?

Week 4, day 2

Let's start at the end!

Conclusions

and Works Cited

Happiner by Ben-Shahar
Harvard Guide to Happiness
Does Education Make You Happy?


Then Peer Review!  We will start simply

Week 4, Day 1

Today we'll review paragraph structure and discuss using support in your paragraphs.

1) First, we'll talk about the different ways to use texts to support your ideas, including paraphrases and quoting.
Here's a great handout!

2) Then we'll look at some excellent techniques for quotation
(yes, we'll talk about sandwiches)

 

3) Then review the MLA style for in-text citation; and briefly glance at this sample MLA paper.

4) Finally, discuss any issues that have come up for you.

HW - Create the final draft of at least 700 words - have the paper in "teacher" ready format.  You can, however, wait on the conclusion and Works Cited Page - we'll be talking about those Thursday.

Week 3, Day 2

Today we will review our intros and thesis statements ... and then discuss writing body paragraphs~~~~ hw. First draft of paper ... at least 400-500 words with at least 3 body paragraphs. Identify quotes to use in paper and bring all sources to class This way we can work on using sources in class

Extra support:

• A simple handout
• a worksheet/formula...you could use this "system" to write one of your body paragraphs.
• Great article on General to specific format here

and the contact list is ready to go!

Week 3, Day 1 - Happiness in Education

1 - Watching (and taking notes on) video


2 - Checking annotations (during video)
3 - The Writing Process
4 - The assignment for paper 2

"Discuss ways in which the education system (administrators, teachers, parents and/or students) can cultivate a happier approach to learning while at the same time maintaining - or even increasing - students' academic performance."

This will be a paper of at least 750 words written in MLA style.  Double-spaced and typed. Be sure to quote from at least 2 of the text(s) used for this class. The paper should be written in "3rd person" style and focus on general ideas and hypothetical situations, rather than tell a "personal" or 1st person story.

hw. Create a thesis, introductory paragraph and outline for your next paper.  Write the intro paragraph. Essay Basics Intro Paragraph

Week 2, Day 2

Today we discussed strategies for reading.  Here are some resources

1) Annoating While Reading

2) Reading to Write

HW; Fully annotated articles.

Week 2 - Day One (Sept 9/10 depending on your group)

Papers are due today .  Be sure to print them out!  Should you need a printer, you can use the Writing Center or Library.  Just be sure to bring your ID.

Today we'll finish

1)  viewing the Dan Gilbert Video (if applicable)
2) Share our first papers/ideas with a peer group
3) Talk about school and happiness

HW: 1) Free Writing about Happiness in School.  2) Download and print these articles for the next few classes.

Day One

Welcome to the Class.

 Register your info at this link.
Take Happiness Inventory


Dan Gilbert Video